Please list 10 ways you can improve your essay scores

1.   put more effort into creating a better, more completethesis 6. widen my vocabularay to add details
2    make a bettter, more direct point                  7 work on grammer and know when to use commas
3.   pick better quotes that explain my poing well   8. make my conclusion recap and conclude my paper
4. explain the quote and make a connection to the point   9.elaberate my points better so people can better understand them
5.  be less repetative in my style of writing             10. conclude each of my body paragraphs with a concluding sentance

Please write any 15 thoughts about the book Slaughterhouse-5.  For each thought, please refer to a specific part of the book that generated this thought (for instance, “It was funny” receives no credit; “It was funny when he described the Tralfamadorians” receives full credit).

1. its intresting that there are 3 plots in the book: tralfamadorians, WWII, and after war.

2. it was intresting the author used so it goes every time there was death

3. it was unusual that the author wrote about shafts pointing upwards

4. it was intresting to see that there were 7 genders on tralfamador
5.its interesting that the traufamadorians had 4 dimensions.
6. its unusual that the author used such dirty language
7.it was funny when every one got soldiers coats but billy got a civilians coat
8.it was funny when billy had to wear the silver boots
9.i thought it was intestine what the trafamadorians thought about free will.
10. i thought it was unusual that the traufamadorians thought they couldn't prevent the destruction of the universe.
11.I thought it was sad when billy's wife valencia died.
12.I was upset when lassaro killed the dog by putting shard of metal in the meat.
13.I thought it was cool that the trafamadorians thought bialys body was beautiful.
14. i thought it was funny when billy and valencia were talking about there baby fat.
15.I thought it was depressing that so many people dies in the dredson bombings



Slaughterhouse-5.
1. Time is not real

2. War is a way of life

3. death is frequent and unpreventable

4. Sex is a major aspect of live

5. time is only what you make it




Write a conversation between yourself and Billy Pilgrim in which he tries to teach you a lesson based on his own experiences.  You must explain IN DEPTH at least 3 specific events and details from the book in order to receive full credit.  This conversation should go on as long as it takes to demonstrate YOUR UNDERSTANDING of Billy’s experiences.
Conversation:
Danny: hey Billy

Billy: hey Danny have you heard about traufamador?

Danny noi haven't Billy what is it?

Billy: its a really cool place that i have time traveled to many times.

Danny: Time travel?

Billy: yeah i can travel time.

Danny: no way

Billy: yes way the trafamadorians are really nice creatures
Danny: ok your creeping me out billy
Billy: no im serious i have met them.

Danny: alright billy im sure you have

Billy:i have danny i really have.

Billy- Hey whats up Danny?
Danny- nothing really Billy You?
Billy- nothing eitherdo you know what the fourth dimension is?
Danny- No Danny what is the 4th dimension?
Billy- It's time danny the fourth dimension is time
Danny- wow thats amazing
Billy- ye i can time travel danny i have experienced this demension
Danny- wow can you show me?
Billy- no i cant but i really wish i could
Danny- ti dont believe you then billy
Billy- its true i promise
Danny- liar

Billy- Are you afraid of death Danny?
Danny-why yes i am billy.
Billy-Why Danny its just part of a cycle.
Danny-ok billy what do you mean?
Billy-i mean death is a part of live and is inevitable.
Danny-so i shouldn't be afraid of dying then?
Billy-yes Danny thats what im trying to tell you
Danny-Thanks Billy your a real keeper.